Wednesday, February 13, 2019
Dreams
My first dream was with Mr. Evans and the frogs. I came to realize that this was only the beginning that my dreams somewhat came to reality. These dreams are repetitive and it feels like it is a build up for a big moment. My most recent dream has consisted of a large number of wild animals all looking at me and saying "He's not here! He's taking the evidence! Catch him!". It made me wonder why it was animals telling me this information. At first, the frogs only seemed like a coincidence when Mr. Evans pointed a the factory in my previous dream. So I really doubt that I'm going to see these animals if this event actually happens.
One day I was staying home and watching TV and turned on the news. The kept talking about the most spectacular show coming to town tonight with a bunch of different breeds of animals. It took me a minute as I sat there watching but they kept talking about the animals in my dreams. I realized that the killer of Mr. Evans was going to steal the evidence of his case. Once I realized, I grabbed my jean jacket and ran out the house and started to go to the police station. When I was approximately 100 yards away, I see someone with a hoodie walk out the door with boxes loaded up in a black car. I started running after the car but I obviously wasn't quick enough. I lost the killer. I walk into the police station and see it completely trashed with nobody inside of it. This is when I knew the my dreams are no longer a coincidence. I might be able to solve and find the killer of Mr. Evans if I start paying attention to my dreams.
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1. What do you like about the topic sentence?
ReplyDeleteI like that the sentence makes me wonder what the significance of his dreams are… which I find out as I read more!
2. What do you want to know about them?
So did the dreams only start with the first one about the frogs? Or has he always had weird dreams that seem to give insight into reality?
3. One thing you are unclear about the character, give them a suggestion about how to clarify this.
I’m a bit unclear on what Billy’s motivation is to actually pay attention to his dreams. You say that he wants to pay attention to them so that he can solve the murder, but why exactly does he want to solve the murder? Is it curiosity? His morals?
4. Give them a suggestion on how to develop characterization.
To develop characterization, I would just add some more imagery about his physique and how he behaves when executing the actions you describe.
But Quan knew there was something, something that he had to chase after or else he would never be satisfied without it.
ReplyDeleteWhat’s happening with Quan’s rap career?
What happened to Quan’s other friends?
Don’t forget about the setting that you established in your first blog
Topic Sentence:
ReplyDeleteIt took me a minute as I sat there watching but they kept talking about the animals in my dreams. I realized that the killer of Mr. Evans was going to steal the evidence of his case. This is a pretty good couple of sentences to develop your character.
Question:
Why are you dreaming about animals?
Unclear on:
I really don't like the use of approximately 100 yards, just seems like your trying to get more words instead of including details.. How are his dreams giving him such clear views of the real world, it just doesn't seem realistic.
Suggestion:
I think you should get over the dreams, they don't really develop your character and I want to see him do more things in the real world.